Childhood

[Amoonsinas]

Originally Posted by Astraad

I loved it! You write so vividly, the story really comes alive.

Can I make one tiny suggestion though? Obviously, feel free to ignore it (I'm no writer, and it's your tale anyway), but I noticed that Dion used the exclamation "Geez". I just wondered if maybe you would want to change that to something more relevant to their culture than ours, since that word has Christian connotations.

Can't wait for the next chapter!

Of course you can! I enjoy and encourage everyone to critique/comment about anything they see fit to comment about. In my opinion, there's never a stupid question asked or a critique taken/given wrong. It helps in it's own way.

I honestly didn't know that "Geez" was a Christian connotation! But now that I think of it, you're right. I had only really thought at a "pre-teen" level... though I think i'll have to think of a different expression language..

Thanks for the feedback! It was greatly appreciated!

[Soulpainter]

Truely a dream is never tangable until one reaches forth and attempts to grasp it within their clutches. From a wisping cloud that wraps itself untouchable within and around our fingers to the grass rocks and soil below our feet it changes, shifting first and formost into a sand of quickness at first, pulling us in until we master this dream of ours. soon though, with abit of work and a sometimes some blood sweat and tears...we learn to master this dream...and soar with the eagles wings spread wide.

Let not your dreams fly away my friend without first attempting to chain them

I have learned that some of the sweetest things experienced in life were only recieved after crawling through the roughest parts that hell itself had to offer.

*bows to his friend*

[Amoonsinas]

Originally Posted by Soulpainter

Truely a dream is never tangable until one reaches forth and attempts to grasp it within their clutches. From a wisping cloud that wraps itself untouchable within and around our fingers to the grass rocks and soil below our feet it changes, shifting first and formost into a sand of quickness at first, pulling us in until we master this dream of ours. soon though, with abit of work and a sometimes some blood sweat and tears...we learn to master this dream...and soar with the eagles wings spread wide.

Let not your dreams fly away my friend without first attempting to chain them

I have learned that some of the sweetest things experienced in life were only recieved after crawling through the roughest parts that hell itself had to offer.

*bows to his friend*

*hugs Soulpainter*

Aww thanks. Maybe someday we can work together and make the dream come alive for us both

Your confidence in me makes me feel better. Everyone's confidence and positive thoughts in me have made all of this so very positive for me as well. Look for the next chapter soon (tm) (Aredhel should copywrite that sentance )

[Aredhel]

hehe...actually, Cindy (Abigale) started it long ago. It's just been adapted...over and over and over....