Wow! I'm really absorbed by your story, its beautiful. The scene in the garden, with the song and the flight, was really exhilarating. Poor Allissa though, she just can't do anything right in her father's eyes.
I spotted one spelling mistake: in the fourth paragraph you have "distant grass boarder", which should really be "border". A boarder is someone who goes to boarding school
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Keep writing, I'm really enjoying this
. You're talented!